Wednesday, January 22, 2014

Writing about intangibles

Next week I'm teaching a mini-workshop for writers at a major financial services company.  In preparation, I've been reviewing what I've learned writing for all types of insurance (including pet and burial) as well as other financial services including mutual funds.  Some of these points may seem basic, but they're often overlooked and/or under-valued.

Call to action (CTA).   Tell people what you want them to do and why they should do it.  What action do you want your customer or prospect to take as a result of reading your message?  What can you do to motivate them to call, click or complete an application?

Humanize benefits.  Show people enjoying the end benefit of what you sell.  For example, most parents want their children to get an education.  So, if you market education loans or life insurance, show a smiling graduate in cap and gown with a benefit caption below it.

“You can’t say that.”  The next time your attorney or compliance officer utters these words after reading your copy, respond with, “OK, what can I say?”  It may mean changing just one or two words and make your copy even stronger. 

Engage readers with something unusual.  Providing toilet tune-ups is more attention–grabbing than saying you check for mundane leaks and rusted parts.  And who could have imagined a gecko would become the unforgettably engaging spokesperson for an auto insurance company with an otherwise-difficult-to-remember name?    

Focus on customer benefits, not company history. Nobody really cares that you are headquartered in Omaha and have been in business over a hundred years unless you tell them why it’s important.  You have a hundred-year history of paying claims promptly and customer service calls are all taken in the heart of America, not off-shore. 

Create an offer with value that supports what you sell.  Instead of giving away tangibles such as iPods, toasters and free dinners, provide an easy-to-use online calculator that helps people figure how much insurance they need.  Or provide a free checklist that assists potential customers in comparing confusing mortgage loans, apples-to-apples. Today’s consumers value content that educates and empowers.   

Keep it simple.  Intangibles like insurance are often perceived as being difficult to understand.  Confusion slows down decision-making and results in avoidance.  Your marketing mission is to make your product simple and understandable.  For example, Aflac has forever redefined disability coverage as something that simply pays you money when you’re hurt and miss work. 

Never use the words “applying is easy' unless it’s true.  When was the last time you completed your company’s application?  Give it to 5 people that fit your customer profile but don’t work for your company, and ask them to fill it out. Watch them do it. Simple-to-complete applications/forms combine the right words with good design, simple organization and readable typefaces.    

Write in plain English.  Yes, insurance and financial services do have regulatory content that must be included. However, don’t pepper your marketing copy with killers words like “undersigned,” “heretofore,” “the party of the first part,” and other legal gibberish in mouse type.  Instead, use plain English that’s easily understood.  Said another way, don’t let compliance officers, attorneys or software developers write your marketing copy.       

Have your creative team work as a team.  No matter which type of media delivers your message or which channel you're selling through, you get the best, most effective end-product when you have your writer, designer, programmer and others involved in the creative process work together.  Don’t isolate them in cubicles, silos and windowless corners.  The best ideas come from shared understanding and creative collaboration. 

There's a lot more to talk about but this is going to have to do for starters.
 

Saturday, January 18, 2014

Seriously? If you love chocolate, you'd better read this.

I just saw an article in the Wall Street Journal about Hershey joining with 3D Systems Corp. to develop ways to use 3-D printing technology to produce chocolate.  It appears that for as little as $5,000, someday soon I may be able to print my own candy bars right here next to my desk.  Something about this just doesn't feel right. 

Sunday, January 5, 2014

48 idea-starters for letter and email openers

In March of 2012, I wrote the following Message & Media column for Target Marketing magazine because I know how important and difficult it is to write the first sentence of anything. A letter. An email. An article. Openers can be onerous.  

Little did I know as I wrote this column that it would become what Thorin McGee, Target's Editor-in-Chief, has told me was the magazine's top viewed article in 2013. That's a year after it was first published. Obviously, a lot of other writers share my pain.  So I'm sharing it here with you, dear reader/writer.  And it comes with my continued thanks to Herschell Gordon Lewis.  Keep reading and you'll find out why.   

P.S. After I first posted this, I did a one-hour webinar Copy Starters: 48+ Ideas for Letter and Email Openers for Target Marketing with over 1,000 people registered.  It's been archived if you want to watch it.  It's free and includes a ton of examples you may find helpful.

Whether you write, approve or read and respond to direct mail letters and emails, I think you'll agree the first sentence of copy is critical for grabbing your attention. It sets the bait for hooking scanners ... who become readers ... who then turn into responders.
The opening sentence can be both a hot spot and a rough spot. 

It's a hot spot for the reader because it's one of the first places the eye looks for the answer to the question, "What's in it for me?"

It also can be a rough spot for the writer for all the obvious reasons. There's a lot of pressure to get it right, and we want to get it right the first time, which can be challenging and stressful. So, for writers, the opening sentence can be a very rough spot.

However, experience and experts have taught me there are solutions for writing successful letter and email openers.

Almost 20 years ago, Herschell Gordon Lewis  wrote a mini-series of articles on "Fifty of the Easiest Ways to Begin an Effective Sales Letter." I kept article No. 9 in the series and still refer to it. And, no surprise, I've discovered many of Lewis' direct mail letter opening ideas can also be applied to email copy.

I recently asked Lewis—an internationally recognized author of more than 20 books on direct response writing also known as "The Godfather of Direct Marketing and Gore"—for a favor. I asked for permission to share a handful of his ideas with readers of this column. I'm also including a few of my own and some from direct response writers Dan Kennedy  and Donna Baier Stein .

Notice most of these openers have a conversational tone, focus on you-the-reader, and make no attempt to be clever. According to Lewis, writing good direct mail copy isn't about showing how clever you are. Effective direct response copy communicates, connects and generates response.

The next time you're stumped when starting to write an email or direct mail letter, give one of these a try:

1. "If you're like me …"
2. "What if …?"
3. "Because you are a …"
4. "I need your help."
5. "Congratulations!"
6. "You are invited …"
7. "As you know …"
8. "You have a free gift waiting for you …"
9. Use a narrative of a specific episode ("It's early morning. You unlock the door to your .  
    business and there you see...")
10. "This is your private invitation ..."
11. "You're a rare bird. A customer who deserves …"
12. "Good news!"
13. "We've got some good and bad news. The bad news is ____. But here's the good part."
14. "Did you know …?"
15. "Have you ever wished that …?"
16. "We've missed you."
17. "I've enclosed …"
18. "You're in trouble. And so am I. Here's why."
19. "Are you paying too much? Do you know if you're paying too much?"
20. "This is going to be short, sweet, and full of good news for you and your family."
21. "Believe it or not ..."
22. "Because you're _________, you're eligible to _______."
23. "I'll get right to the point."
24. "If you like ________, you'll love ______."
25. Lead with an appropriate quotation.
26. "I'd be lying if I said my reason for writing is ..."
27. "This is your last chance."
28. "Because of your loyalty ..."
29. "You're important to us."
30. "You have been named an honorary employee for the month of ..."
31. "Thank you for …"
32. "You may be wondering why …"
33. Start on a positive note, even if the letter has a negative message.
34. "You have ___ days left to pick up the phone or go online to …."
35. Lead with a strong testimonial.
36. "For the first time, you can …"
37. "Thank you for your recent order. Did you know that you can now …."
38. Ask a question. "Do you make these 5 mistakes when you're shopping for groceries?"
39. "Our records show it's time to ______ your __________."
40. Lead with your offer.
41. Tell a story.
42. Give a warning. "According to ______, two-thirds of those with your job title will lose their jobs in the next 12 months."
43. "They didn't think I could ________, but I did. And you can, too. Here's how."
44. "It is my privilege to invite you to ..."
45. "If you are a_______, then you can _____."
Here are some additional suggestions for making the copy for your letters and emails look easier to read:
46. Limit 75% to 80% of your words to five characters or less.
47. Make sentences 1.5 lines or shorter. Double-check line length for ease of eye-tracking.
48. Keep the first paragraph to three lines or less.

One last thing: Don't stress about writing the perfect opening sentence. If it doesn't come to you right off the bat, just start writing. There's a really good chance you're going to find the perfect opener buried in your second or third paragraph. I speak from experience.